Day 192 – Red – Whispered Words

Thick,

sticky,

salty,

I taste it on my tongue,

I feel it drying  on my face,

your empty eyes look at me,

your rage still shining through,

a rage you forced at me,

I had no choice,

I had no decisions,

your life I had to take out of fear,

to survive,

as you tried to kill me,

like all the rest,

you coaxed down here,

down here inside your sin,

but I was triumphant,

I stopped your reign,

I ended your life,

but,

was it all in vein,

I see them moving,

in the shadows,

their eyes glowing,

watching me,

I grip the blade,

I clench my teeth,

come on motherfuckers,

it’s time,

fresh meat!

 

5 Comments Add yours

  1. I really enjoyed this. It was a fun read! I love the last few lines the most! ^_^

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    1. Thanks so much, it’s the swearing right? I noticed to my self as I wrote this that swearing is somewhat absent from the Whispered Words. Besides that, it gives it an emotional kick right at the end.

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      1. Yes, and the general determination in the main characters voice at the end. Believe it or not, swearing can be used to add emotional emphasis. I think people just assume if you put swearing in something it’s for the sake of swearing (which does happen too).

        I just think they overlook certain things sometimes.

        I was super delighted to read this though. ^_^

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      2. Agreed, I know I use a lot of swearing in my writing, but a lot of my stories are in those moments, when any sane, normal rational person would swear, so it’s emphasising the emotional turmoil the characters are in. I swear, everyone does, in their own way, and when life is coming down, you’re going to lose those inhibitions and swear until the cows come home. Thanks again, after reading your works, I’m always chuffed you like mine.

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      3. No worries, and I agree with the he swearing thing. Most sane people are quick too in situations of extremes. Life and Death being one of those. ^_^

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